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'Into the Lion's Den' in the stories section. I think you'll enjoy it. It's the first one I've ever had published. Tim was gracious enough to host it. I'd like to hear what you have to say about it. smith helped to inspire it when he posted a few weeks ago about how he helped a kid who was having problems with a bully.
Thanks Tim
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Thanks! Thanks for the notice, and thanks in advance for writing and sharing your words. Lots of people seem to think that writing fiction is easy...
But it isn't. It requires focus, energy, drive, creativity, imagination.
All that plus a willing host.
And another plus. Reader feedback. I'll tell you what I think after I read it.
Hey! A new fiction writer is born! Cool!
"Always forgive your enemies...nothing annoys them quite so much." Oscar Wilde
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That hit really close to home. You expressed
it all so well. Sad to say, that is exactly
the way it happens. I hope I see more of this
story and others from you soon. Great 1st go!!
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I appreciate the comments, here and via email and that you've taken the time to read it. I'm definitely wanting to write more of this story and have started a second chapter. There's plenty of aftermath to deal with. Afterall, bullies don't just go away, fights at school don't go unpunished, parents do become curious as to why their sons are getting into fights at school, not to mention little brothers who hear all kinds of rumors. I don't know that all that will be in there, but some will and perhaps a surprise or two.
And David you're right. Writing stories isn't easy. I've attempted several, but can never seem to get them just right, until now. I usually write poetry because I don't have to deal with things like dialogue, plot, etc. and because it doesn't have to make sense. ;=) Actually poetry isn't all that easy either, but it's not quite as tough.
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e,
I was going to e-mail you my congratulations; but then I saw this thread, so I thought I'd do it more "publicly".
Sadly, there is a lot of truth in this fictional story (which, I guess it's safe to say, provided at least part of the motivation to write it in the first place). Scenarios like that are played out daily in schools everywhere, while (again to paraphrase Bob Dylan) most people turn away and pretend not to see. And what makes it even more tragic is that some of those in positions of authority (like that coach) actually enable it and encourage it with impunity. It is a situation which smith and the other younger readers and participants of this forum know all too well, and my heart goes out to them that they have to live in such constant fear.
One observation, however: did you really have to name that Neanderthal "Ron"? [ ].
Thanks for sharing your story, e (and, of course, thanks to Tim for hosting it). I am looking forward to reading more of your writing; and in the meantime, I shall continue to think good thoughts!
We do not remember days...we remember moments.
Cesare Pavese
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I've enjoyed reading all the replies whether here or via email. I suppose I didn't HAVE to name the guy 'Ron.' It just seemed to fit. I am working on chapter two. Don't know when it'll be ready, though.
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"Just seemed to fit", eh? Thanks a whole heap!
We do not remember days...we remember moments.
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Does anybody have any Band-Aids? My knucles are bleeding, for some unknown reason.
We do not remember days...we remember moments.
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that my nose is as well?
Chapter 2 is now up. I hope everyone will check it out and that you enjoy as much as you did chapter 1. I've enjoyed all the comments both here and via email. Keep 'em coming.
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No, e, your nose isn't bleeding; my knuckles are bleeding from dragging them on the ground in true Neanderthal style!
I have checked out Chapter 2 already, and also hope everybody else does. Can't wait for Chapter 3!
We do not remember days...we remember moments.
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Well at least it was my face that you scraped them on. ;=)
Chapter 3 is coming along nicely. I think it's going to be a little longer than the others.
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I remember those days in the principal's office, sitting there fantasizing about all the things I wanted to tell him. There were times when I didn't quite have the control that Mike has. Glad you like the humor, too. I kind of giggled at that 'handle' thing when I thought of it.
Chapter 3 is nearly complete. A quick revision or two and it should be ready. I've also written part of the middle of chapter 4, but no beginning or ending. The lion's are getting rather hungry and Mike is begining to look a lot like dinner. Not that he hasn't been quite a meal already. ;o)
Think good thoughts,
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