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... and such a tease, too!
An awesome beginning.
You've got me (and I'm certain the same applies to everyone else) hooked, providing us with tantelizingly tasty little morsels delivered up in a fresh, yet timely, take on a topic so near the heart of the very medium much of today's youth increasingly turn to for insight, advise and yes "companionship".
A certified "hot-flush", guaranteed to stir the basest licentious and lascivious behaviour in even the most jaded reader, and at one and the same time, tear us apart in seldom remembered teen-angst, although in my day it generally revolved around community bulletin-boards, the personals in the local newspaper, occasionally hastily penned notes on a lavitory wall, and of course awaiting that all important telephone call, which just as often as not never came.
Well done.
Warren C. E. Austin
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I really like the first two chapters, and am anxious for more.
Very well done.
Thanks for sharing it with us.
Kevin
"Be excellent to each other, and, party on dudes"!
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"'You spoke of chance, smith, as if such a thing were certain to exist. In the matter you speak of, Destiny, there is no such thing as chance for whichever way we choose, right or left, it must lead to an end. And that end is our destiny."
-Master Po.
May your destiny, little smith, be the one YOU choose. Not the one chosen for you. And always, be true to you!
Thank you for chapter six.
-Lenny
"But he that hath the steerage of my course,
direct my sail."
-William Shakespeare, Romeo and Juliet, Act One, Scene IV
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warren c. e. austin
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God, how I hated Jordy at the close of Chapter Five.
I'm so glad you've given him back to Dan, and to me!
Jordy's reaction to seeing Dan for the very first-time, is one I'm not able to fathom, although the wisdom of my age grants that given the circumstance I am now possibly able to understand it, but I can't ever accept it.
I have my father, a more biggoted individual you'd never care to meet, to thank for my perspective. My father, (like his father before him and his father's father, ad nauseum) whose prejudice knew no bounds, acknowledged it (unlike his own father), and would never sanction its' finding shelter in his two sons, insisting on his welcoming anyone either of us cared to bring in our home, consciously confronting them with his prejudice, but insisting that he would never contenance this same behaviour from either my brother or I, and in doing so encouraged us to develop friendships that he would never have found possible. My father was moderately successful in his desire to rid the next generation of the "family" gene-pool of his bigotry; I have none, at least none that I or anyone I've ever encountered has been able to consciously discern; whereas my brother does, but to a considerably lesser degree than our father, and his own two daughters appear to, like me have none what-so-ever.
Consequently I've known, sexually, two mobility challenged and wheel-chair bound males, both whilst I was in my teens; the first, Gordon, who at that time a teen like myself, and stricken with cerebral palsy from birth, was plain and simply, a wonderful individual rediating warmth, and compassion, and whose very goodness was almost spiritual in character with an all encompassing love of life and everyone he encountered; the second, and I've new his name, in his late twenties was the victim of a motorcycle accident in his teens, or so he informed me.
I came to know a third through a work-place, Chris who was an amputee, but circumstance never allowed that we ever become intimate.
Unfortunately Gordon died (aged-15) quite suddenly from respiratory failure not long after I first met him; but, we had been able, in our short time together to experience a great deal. I know my life has been much richer for having known him.
My un-named aquaintance was a "trick" in the broadest sense of the word, although no money ever changed hands, with none being asked for, and none ever offered. I recall it must have been probably around three or four in the morning. I had been loitering "on the track", a drive-by cruising circuit that existed in central Toronto in the late 1960's, centred as it were in the midst of the then Gay Ghetto. He pulled up in his car after his having done the rounds at least four or five times. I liked the looks of him, with him having flaming red-hair, and away we went. I had seen the wheel-chair collapsed in the back-seat, but truthfully never gave it a second glance, nor was I at all intimidated when he questioned me on my wanting to make it with a "crip", but I did wonder how his ambivalence towords me might affect our tryst. Whilst I enjoyed the one and only time with him, unfortunately this was one very angry young man, and where I might have had the desire to have further and on-going encounters with him (driven probably by my fetish for red-hair), I just couldn't get past his implied potential to violence. Looking back from the distance of time, I maybe should have tried just a little bit harder.
It was not long after the encounter with the un-named motorcylcist, that I met, fell in love and entered into my one and only long-term relationship.
I met Chris, in the traumatic period following my lovers death, and had things not been as they were for me - I was literally a mes- I might possibly have wanted to develop something more than we had.
Warren C. E. Austin
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While I am also quite happy (to say the least) about the events of chapter 6, I never hated or was even angry at Jordan. My feeling were more confused than anything. Mostly about how I felt, I understood the initial panic type feeling Jordy might have. I was torn by my disdain for prejudice, and confused by the lack of understanding of what was to happen next.
I have to chalk that up to smiths' unique ability to evoke thought and feeling, and his insight into those feelings.
(You already know how I think anyway)
Awesome writing dude!
Kevin
"Be excellent to each other, and, party on dudes"!
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I had the feeling that Jordan was more in shock and felt bad because of his own thoughtlessness than anything else. I was hoping so at least. I was glad to see that it worked out. I've already told you what I think about your writing so just keep up the good work.
Think good thoughts,
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well lest start off by saying thank you smith.....you rock bro!!!!
chapter 5 brought tears to my eyes and chapter 6 brought a warm fuzzy feeling to my heart and soul.
now smith has a whole week end to writhe chapter 7 - 99....hehehe
keep up the awesome work little bro
peace
tim...of USA
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I want to add my thanks for this story again, smith!
I didn't hate Jordy either...more disappointed than anything. But, on the other hand, Dan didn't give him any warning time to get adjusted to the idea, either. He simply presumed that Jordy would react negastively, which might have contributed to the initial response.
Yes, I know about prejudice against the disabled...and I'm not into blaming the victem...but I also don't really believe in the concept of "victem" either...
What if Jordy's reaction had been something like Warren's??
Just a thought
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Late as usual - but I have just finished reading chapters five and six and I cried so much at the end of chapter five that I could hardly see the words at the start of chapter six and then, when I could, I cried again and had to stop reading until I felt able to carry on. How is it that so much talent is out there in iomfats land? Every writer who has had a story hosted by timmy (and timmy himself)has evoked so many emotions within me and I hope this wealth of talent never dries up - you are all deserved of awards in my opinion.
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warren c. e. austin
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You've reaffirmed my faith in the potential for decency amongst members of mankind.
I'm beginning to fall in love with Jordy myself.
Warren C. E. Austin
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