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Silent is the Ocean this night,
A soft cry is heard, from the boy outside.
Wandering the ocean, looking for his someone.
He finds a boy, lost and alone.
In the wilderness they lay, together talking,
Finding out what needs to be said,
Experiencing love, emotion, Passion and Life,
The moments of Passion, light up the world,
in a Small Light of Red and Pink.
Smiles form on our faces, hand in hand,
Taking a small kiss from you,
Your lips like a rose, kissable, and assuring me,
of the way I feel for you.
Take me to your Silent place, where the Ocean is quiet,
and the birds fly through the air pacefully.
Take me in your arms, and kiss me slowly,
Assure me once more, that you love me..
~Josh~
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Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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WOW
So say what you want
(You know I'm wasting all my time)
You've gotta mean it when you say what you want
(You're only safe when you're alone)
And everybody's on your mind
Saying anything to get you by
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Another really good one.
Your poems have a certain quality about them that reminds me of another poet (Edsel Ford) who I only learned about last year whilst in the USA
He has been reported by some to have been one of the finest poets in the US.
His poems have a certain simplicity about them.
You can read about his life here
http://www.rogersarkansas.com/museum/donationOfTheMonth/01-05.asp
And I can get you some copies of his poems if you are interested (difficult to find even on the net)
His name gets confused with Henry Fords son Edsel, who was also a poet
The reason I found out about him is because his brother is a very close friend and showed me some of his books.
I am sure you could do just as well with some of your poems.
Keep up the good work and let me know if you wish to read any of Edsels poems.
Aussie
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Aussie
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Here's one of Edsel Ford's poems
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aww^^
thanks for the comments everyone^_^ *huggles*
Aussie^^
Thats a beautiful poem^^ Thanks for showing it to me^^
~Josh~
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Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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meow^^
im glad you like it Jason^^
~Josh~
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Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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The thing I have noticed with Edsels poems (and I'm no expert)are that the opening line sets the scene and the last line makes a profound statement.
I think you achieved that in 'Ocean Wanderer'
The main difference of course is that in his poems the alternate lines rhyme (I think there is a name for this)and there is a rhythm. I don't know If you would be interested in trying that style but it could be fun.
Also worth noting (and I know I am harping here)is that the reason his poems have survived the last 40 years is because he put them in print and kept them. If he had relied on your theory of re-writing them at some stage later we may have missed out because he died (suddenly) relatively early in his life of a brain tumour.
Here is another one of his poems that appeals to me.
Aussie
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'Building a House' is a beautiful poem.
While I was reading it, I started to hear children singing it, like a choir or something. Wierd I guess, but still, I think it is a beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing it with me.
I'm not sure if I'd be good at writing a rhyming poem. It's a hard thing to do for me. I suppose I could try it. Maybe it will be good.^^
~Josh~
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Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Josh, thanks for your comments and glad you enjoyed it.
That poem has sometimes brought tears to my eyes when I have read it.
The way you heard a childrens choir is very interesting. That could be considered to be a spiritual experience by some.
Of course any poem will mean different things to different people.
Try my suggestion and see how you go.
Aussie
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thanks Aussie I will^^
btw, have you heard Libera? it was them singing it^^
~Josh~
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Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Yes I really like them. Interesting eh!!
Aussie
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yep.^^
I LOVE! Libera.
Twilight is Staling is a fav song I have of theirs.
~Josh~
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Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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As I have previously mentioned in the hymn thread my fave is "Abide with me"
Also like "Stay with Me" The video with it is good too.
Aussie
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I loved the video for Stay With Me.
At the end, when they two boys were holding hands and running, I thought it was cute.
~Josh~
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Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Yes that was cute
Why don't you have your say as to what spirituality means to you in the other thread.
Aussie
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