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Truth, by ~Josh~  [message #38289] Fri, 03 November 2006 22:10 Go to next message
Josh is currently offline  Josh

On fire!

Registered: April 2006
Messages: 1012



Hug the Wind, Keep the Water,
Same somewhere, undercover,
Black and White, from day to day,
Simple Pleasures, Simple Pain.

A way of Love from underneath,
The sea of Pain, my skin so deep,
Covered in white, covered in red,
Singing songs above my head.

Singing something, so unheard
Love undying, Colours flying.
Mystic shapes, colours blinding,
Into something just in writing.

Kept sealed away, for yesterday,
the Pain of today, and tomorrow I will say,
Kept sealed on un-scarred lips,
The truth Lies within, a Hidden Kiss

~Josh~



21.

Love who you want to.

~Josh~
Re: Truth, by ~Josh~  [message #38310 is a reply to message #38289] Sun, 05 November 2006 01:26 Go to previous message
Aussie is currently offline  Aussie

Really getting into it

Registered: August 2006
Messages: 475



No doubt you are still waiting for a comment on this.
The more I read it the more I liked it.
I like the rhythm of it. It does paint some interesting pictures for me.
I toyed with the idea of replacing hidden with forbidden in the last line but can't decide if its right or not. Any thoughts?

How long does it take you to come up with the words for your poems?

Aussie
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