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help with a story my cousin is writting  [message #39346] Wed, 29 November 2006 00:51 Go to next message
jacmar is currently offline  jacmar

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any body who has good story writing experience/skills willing to help a kid 14 do his first story please let me know please serious offers please jay has read the story so far all the best guys jacXXX

[Updated on: Wed, 29 November 2006 00:52]




Jay, I love u. You are my heart and my soul.
You are my other half. The final piece to my puzzle. I am complete when I am with you.
You turn a dark day into a bright sunny day.
You make me giddy with joy.Just from hearing your voice.
Is your cuz in the US or the UK?  [message #39347 is a reply to message #39346] Wed, 29 November 2006 02:31 Go to previous messageGo to next message
cossie is currently offline  cossie

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When it comes to story-writing, the languages are more different than you might think! If he's in the US, it would be much better to get help from the US, but if no help is forthcoming we Brits will see what we can do.

What's the story about?

By the way, congratulations to you and Jay - I hope it works out!



For a' that an' a' that,
It's comin' yet for a' that,
That man tae man, the worrld o'er
Shall brithers be, for a' that.
Re: Is your cuz in the US or the UK?  [message #39351 is a reply to message #39347] Wed, 29 November 2006 02:55 Go to previous messageGo to next message
jacmar is currently offline  jacmar

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well were from the usa but hes wrting in uk as thats were we live and he doing it as an american living in usa but he had help from a uk author but that has stopped



Jay, I love u. You are my heart and my soul.
You are my other half. The final piece to my puzzle. I am complete when I am with you.
You turn a dark day into a bright sunny day.
You make me giddy with joy.Just from hearing your voice.
Still better to get US help if you can.  [message #39354 is a reply to message #39351] Wed, 29 November 2006 03:46 Go to previous messageGo to next message
cossie is currently offline  cossie

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By the way, you didn't say what the story was about.



For a' that an' a' that,
It's comin' yet for a' that,
That man tae man, the worrld o'er
Shall brithers be, for a' that.
Re: Still better to get US help if you can.  [message #39372 is a reply to message #39354] Wed, 29 November 2006 06:31 Go to previous messageGo to next message
jacmar is currently offline  jacmar

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gay teen love semi true tale but hes living in uk so i think maybe a brit might help him more but any one would be helpfull

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Jay, I love u. You are my heart and my soul.
You are my other half. The final piece to my puzzle. I am complete when I am with you.
You turn a dark day into a bright sunny day.
You make me giddy with joy.Just from hearing your voice.
Re: Still better to get US help if you can.  [message #39375 is a reply to message #39372] Wed, 29 November 2006 07:31 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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The thing about writing is that it must come from the heart. And it must be expressive. If it does both of those then it is likely to fly. If one is absent then it may well fail.

First have a look at http://iomfats.org/storyshelf/guide/writing.html which is, in print, as much help as I can be in person, so to speak.

I'm happy to read anything, and the risk is that I may not like it, of course. I'm happy to be helpful, but I am not an editor. Others have those skills far better than I do.



Author of Queer Me! Halfway Between Flying and Crying - the true story of life for a gay boy in the Swinging Sixties in a British all male Public School
Re: Still better to get US help if you can.  [message #39379 is a reply to message #39375] Wed, 29 November 2006 10:38 Go to previous messageGo to next message
jacmar is currently offline  jacmar

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he want help with editing and stuff not the actual story line etc like i said timmy he knows what he wants to say. can i send u the chapters hes written ?



Jay, I love u. You are my heart and my soul.
You are my other half. The final piece to my puzzle. I am complete when I am with you.
You turn a dark day into a bright sunny day.
You make me giddy with joy.Just from hearing your voice.
Re: Still better to get US help if you can.  [message #39394 is a reply to message #39379] Wed, 29 November 2006 14:40 Go to previous messageGo to next message
timmy

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Like I said, I am no editor. But I can read it and say what I see.



Author of Queer Me! Halfway Between Flying and Crying - the true story of life for a gay boy in the Swinging Sixties in a British all male Public School
I might be able to help  [message #39398 is a reply to message #39379] Wed, 29 November 2006 16:05 Go to previous messageGo to next message
Deeej is currently offline  Deeej

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I have a good knowledge of spelling and grammar, and I live in the UK. If you're still looking for someone, jac mark, I might be able to help; it depends on the story's scope and length.

If you'd like to contact me, my email address is: spuriously@gmail.com

Best wishes,

David

[Updated on: Wed, 29 November 2006 16:06]

Re: I might be able to help  [message #39402 is a reply to message #39398] Wed, 29 November 2006 17:21 Go to previous messageGo to next message
jacmar is currently offline  jacmar

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thank sent to ur email please the four chapters was edited and grammer checked by mike arram



Jay, I love u. You are my heart and my soul.
You are my other half. The final piece to my puzzle. I am complete when I am with you.
You turn a dark day into a bright sunny day.
You make me giddy with joy.Just from hearing your voice.
Re: I might be able to help  [message #39403 is a reply to message #39402] Wed, 29 November 2006 17:35 Go to previous message
Deeej is currently offline  Deeej

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Hi -- is the version I've got the uncorrected version? If so, there's not much point in both of us correcting all the same mistakes!

Thanks

David
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