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icon7.gif A Rotten Christmas by Jolyon Lewes  [message #75317] Fri, 21 December 2018 16:52 Go to next message
William King is currently offline  William King   France

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This was a brilliantly written story, superb in every detail. It's not too often one picks up a book that simply can't be put down. It read like one of the best period drama that the British are so good at, it was right up there with Another Country. I simply can't believe that chapter four is the end, when I could so easily have read on and on, I was captivated and enthralled.

Even more impressive was the lack of any mistakes, so as an author Jolyon Lewes is either not just a brilliant writer but multi-talented editor and proof reader, or has the support of a very good editor. Do I have any criticisms? Well YES, that there are only four chapters, please write some more, because it's strange to think that this new and wonderful story ends so soon!

http://iomfats.org/storyshelf/hosted/jolyon-lewes/a-rotten-c hristmas/01.html
Re: A Rotten Christmas by Jolyon Lewes  [message #75318 is a reply to message #75317] Fri, 21 December 2018 18:21 Go to previous messageGo to next message
timmy   United Kingdom

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"Leave 'em wanting more!" works very well, doesn't it?

I try to pick up any typos I find even when the author and editor (if any) declare it camera ready

[Updated on: Fri, 21 December 2018 19:26]




Author of Queer Me! Halfway Between Flying and Crying - the true story of life for a gay boy in the Swinging Sixties in a British all male Public School
Re: A Rotten Christmas by Jolyon Lewes  [message #75328 is a reply to message #75317] Mon, 24 December 2018 10:21 Go to previous messageGo to next message
Jolyon Lewes   United Kingdom

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Location: SW England
Registered: September 2012
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I'm immensely grateful to William King for such generous comments on  my story. They have warmed my heart and I very much hope that my story warms the hearts of other readers.

It's deliberate that the tale ends rather abruptly. I leave it to my readers to decide the details of Timothy's future life - but I've given a big fat clue.

I do my own proof-reading and I've learnt to do it patiently and in several separate sessions, a day or more after finishing the writing. My first few stories had all sorts of mistakes that I had to ask Timmy to correct. I think in one instance the hero of the story had about three different names in one paragraph!

Merry Christmas, everyone.

[Updated on: Mon, 24 December 2018 10:24]




Jolyon
Re: A Rotten Christmas by Jolyon Lewes  [message #75330 is a reply to message #75317] Mon, 24 December 2018 18:48 Go to previous message
luvtwinks is currently offline  luvtwinks   United States

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Registered: August 2018
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"William King wrote on Fri, 21 December 2018 16:52"
This was a brilliantly written story, superb in every detail.


I concur!
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