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Look to the Moon,
When the sun is ever bright,
Look to the Moon,
Take some sunlight,
Look to the Moon,
Be careful on your way,
Look to the Moon,
Before you go, I ask you to stay...
Stay with me,
Stay with me tonight,
Right by your side,
I'll be right there with you tonight
Look to the Moon,
be careful on your way
Look to the Moon,
Cause tomorrow is a brighter day...
-Chorus-
And even tho,
The road is long,
Yes even tho,
Your heart belongs
To someone else, you want to scream and shout,
Even tho your heart is yearning,
to give to me a special meaning,
Look to the Moon,
Cause tomorrow I'll be there,
Waiting for you,
Waiting for you...
Look down the road,
And take another glance,
Look down the road,
Take another chance,
And you will see,
A different direction
And you will know,
that you are part,
part of a generation..
-Repeat Chorus-
Look to the Moon,
Cause tomorrow is a brigher day..
Look to the Moon,
In your heart, forever I will stay,
So stay with Me..
21.
Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Who is it by.
So say what you want
(You know I'm wasting all my time)
You've gotta mean it when you say what you want
(You're only safe when you're alone)
And everybody's on your mind
Saying anything to get you by
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i wrote it^^
so its by me^^ *hugs*
~Josh~
21.
Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Its good I liked it.
So say what you want
(You know I'm wasting all my time)
You've gotta mean it when you say what you want
(You're only safe when you're alone)
And everybody's on your mind
Saying anything to get you by
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How can you look to the Moon and be simultaneously there (at the side of a loved one) and yet not (s/he is waiting for you)? What does the Moon represent and why is the loved one there? Why would you look during the day when the Moon can only rarely be seen during the day?
Can you give a little context to make the metaphor work, Josh?
Thanks,
David
[Updated on: Wed, 25 October 2006 20:39] |
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I have seen the mood during the day before.
So say what you want
(You know I'm wasting all my time)
You've gotta mean it when you say what you want
(You're only safe when you're alone)
And everybody's on your mind
Saying anything to get you by
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No Message Body
[Updated on: Wed, 25 October 2006 20:43] |
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Sorry,
I have seen the Moon before during the day.
So say what you want
(You know I'm wasting all my time)
You've gotta mean it when you say what you want
(You're only safe when you're alone)
And everybody's on your mind
Saying anything to get you by
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Look to the Moon from a window, by the side of a loved one.
The Moon is the home of the loved ones, and the loved one is there waiting for him/her.
Look to the Moon just before the moon sets into the day, knowing there will be a brighter day ahead.
--
Does that help you at all?
~Josh~
21.
Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Still a bit confused. If the loved one is at one's side, then how can the loved one also be on the Moon? Why does one need the Moon as a substitute if one already has the person that one is looking for?
It may work if the Moon has a commonly-accepted metaphorical significance that I've overlooked, but I am not aware of one, except where it represents a place that one cannot go except in one's mind.
David
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hm.
now you got me confused. lol
lol.
whatever you think is best.^^
~Josh~
21.
Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Look to a star, because somewhere out in the world, the one who will love you is lookiing at the same star.
I believe in Karma....what you give is what you get returned........
Affirmation........Savage Garden
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That's a lovely idea, Brian, but I'm not convinced it's in the original poem! However, if that's what Josh meant then I am happy to accept it.
David
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Deeej, I think what Josh might be saying is: Stand at a window with your love beside you, look into the moon and you will see your love reflected there.
I believe in Karma....what you give is what you get returned........
Affirmation........Savage Garden
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Maybe -- poetry doesn't make a lot of sense to me at the best of times!
David
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Aussie
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Its's called poetic licence. In a poem the words don't have to necessarily make sense. Some of it is symbolic and the moon conjours up ideas of romance as it has done for time immemorial.
The reason that poetry doesn't mean much to you is that it just doesn't lend itself to scientific evaluation.
In Josh's case it is allowing him to bring his emotions to the surface and express them.
Aussie
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Aussie said,
>The reason that poetry doesn't mean much to you is that it just doesn't lend itself to scientific evaluation.
I think that is questionable. I don't mean scientific evaluation -- science is almost irrelevant to the imagination -- but certainly the greatest poetry can be subject to logical evaluation. Each concept makes sense within a larger whole, or represents a metaphor that enhances those ideas. At first glance, a piece of poetry may not seem to make much sense to me, but after I have read it a few times -- maybe asked someone else if it's really impenetrable -- the meaning usually pops out. It didn't in this case, which is why I asked for further information.
To be honest, in my parent post I was just trying to pass off the subject lightly -- I was not looking for a debate!
David
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meow^^
i got a lot of comments. yay^^
im glad you all have taken an interest in the song i wrote.
Aussie and Brian both have awesome ideas for what my song could mean. So thanks for that.
~Josh~
21.
Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Aussie
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I am too modest to accept that anything I said was awesome but I will agree in relation to Brian's interpretation. I really liked it.
Aussie
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thanks Aussie.
~Josh~
21.
Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Aussie
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Really getting into it |
Registered: August 2006
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Josh, FYI It's 12:15 pm where I am and I have just been looking at the sky. It is a beautiful cloudless day and I can see the moon clearly. It's enough to make me burst forth with some poetry......on second thoughts I think I would rather leave it up to you.
edit( this is wierd but I have just read your poem again and realise I was doing exactly what you say in the 1st verse, getting some sunlight)
Aussie
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wow!
i didnt know it was 12:15 PM where you were. thats awesome^^ i'll just HAVE to write another poem/song/whatever i write, and post it here for you^^
*hugs*
~Josh~
21.
Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Aussie
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Hi Josh, I hope you are keeping a record of your poems in a book. They will be great to look back on in 5, 10 or 20 years time.
Here's the moon as I saw it this afternoon.
Aussie
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Attachment: Oct29$38.JPG
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i keep all my poems on verious websites^^ so they'll stay on the internet forever^^
~Josh~
21.
Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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That's assuming that the web sites stay up forever...
Web sites have a way of vanishing after two or three years. This site has been around longer than most. Even where the site stays up indefinitely, archive material tends to get lost.
David
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Aussie
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Registered: August 2006
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Deeej is correct. Do not rely on the web to look after your work for you.
It will very easily vanish. If you keep it on your own computer print out copies and keep in a folder. If your hard drive crashes you may not be able to recover them from there either ie lost forever.
Aussie
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even if my hard drive does crash someday, i'll always have the ability to write new poems^^ so its not really a big deal^^
~Josh~
21.
Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Josh, ask Timmy if he'll put them in Poetry Corner for you.
Higs
Nigel
I dream of boys with big bulges in their trousers,
Never of girls with big bulges in their blouses.
…and look forward to meeting you in Cóito.
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Aussie
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Registered: August 2006
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I have to disagree with you!! Your poems are a snapshot of a particular moment in your life, and you will probably not be able to rewrite them again as they were. True you will be able to come up with new ones but it is not the same. To me it would be as bad as losing your family photos in a house fire.
Preferrably you should keep a printed copy in 2 or more different places
Listen to your elders because even tho we are no longer 16 and know everything we do at least know something (well hopefully)
Aussie ::-)
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meow^^
but as long as i can remember the specific moments in my life, i will be able to rewrite them^^
~Josh~
21.
Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Aussie
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Registered: August 2006
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Grrrrrrroooooowwwwwwllllll.
I just knew you would know you know everything, you know.
I give up.
Aussie
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awww. Ausie's mad. ^^
cute.
btw. if you all want to go check out my new poems, they'll be here:
http://pyroshadow18.deviantart.com/
go look if you all want to.^^
~Josh~
21.
Love who you want to.
~Josh~
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Aussie
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Registered: August 2006
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Don't worry, I've been mad for years..
purrr..purrr..purrr
Aussie 
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Are you feeling ok? I thought I felt a long speech on the topic. I guess that I am losing the gift.
Sorry hijacking the thread. I have noted both you and Cossie have not done one of you all long post in awhile.
Jay:)
So say what you want
(You know I'm wasting all my time)
You've gotta mean it when you say what you want
(You're only safe when you're alone)
And everybody's on your mind
Saying anything to get you by
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