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P.E.S.I. by Jobe  [message #71897] Mon, 26 September 2016 15:49 Go to next message
Nick Deverill is currently offline  Nick Deverill

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Story shows considerable promise, and the setting is interesting too. Not quite in the bracket of being set in the future, as everything so far is possible, and given another 5 years, could be seen.
Chapter 1 is here

I did spot two errors, both would get past a spell checker - as they are just not quite the right words. Neither detract though from the kind of story that leaves one itching for the next chapter.
Re: P.E.S.I. by Jobe  [message #71999 is a reply to message #71897] Thu, 20 October 2016 08:42 Go to previous message
timmy

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Sometimes I wonder why folk don't also add their thoughts. Perhaps they don't read the stories!

I think, sometimes, that it may be because of the high quality we demand here, such that a tale has to be more than good for folk to make comments. Good is the norm here. Or I hope that is the reason.



Author of Queer Me! Halfway Between Flying and Crying - the true story of life for a gay boy in the Swinging Sixties in a British all male Public School
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