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timmy
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I've just discovered https://notebooklm.google.com and set it the task of crritiquing one of my stories, all six parts of "Hello Buoys!" I doscovered that it is not yet capable of a Literary Critique, a full exercise getting the drains up. Even when asked specificlaly it provides a decent synopsis and analysis for readership.
I asked it to "perform a full literary criticism of the sources"
It pondered very briefly and gave me this:
"Quote:"Literary Criticism of "Hello Buoys!"
The "Hello Buoys!" series of vignettes, written by It's Only Me from Across the Sea and published on IOMfAtS, offers a charming and insightful exploration of young love, burgeoning sexuality, and the pursuit of passion within the backdrop of the competitive world of sailing. The stories, told from Jerry's perspective, chronicle the evolving relationship between him and Tom, two teenage boys who discover their love for each other while navigating the challenges of sailing and the complexities of their own identities.
Character Development and Relationships:
The series excels in its portrayal of realistic and relatable characters.
- Jerry emerges as an observant and thoughtful narrator. His inner monologue reveals his journey of self-discovery as he comes to terms with his feelings for Tom and embraces his newfound identity. Jerry's initial uncertainty about how to categorize their relationship and his struggle to understand his feelings resonate with the experiences of many young people discovering their sexuality.
- Tom, while initially hesitant, demonstrates unwavering love and support for Jerry. His willingness to challenge societal norms and embrace their relationship openly highlights his strong character.
- The supporting characters, like Andy, provide further depth to the narrative. Andy, with his flamboyant personality and willingness to offer guidance, serves as a foil to Tom and Jerry's more understated approach to their relationship. This contrast emphasizes the diverse ways individuals express their identities within the LGBTQ+ community.
Setting and Symbolism:
- The sailing environment becomes more than a mere backdrop; it serves as a symbolic representation of the challenges and triumphs the boys face in their relationship and personal lives. The intricacies of sailing, with its demanding maneuvers and reliance on teamwork, mirror the complexities of navigating a relationship and finding balance within oneself.
- The author's vivid descriptions of the sea, from the tranquil waters of the reservoir to the turbulent waves of the Irish Sea, create an immersive experience for the reader and add a layer of emotional depth to the narrative. The sea becomes a metaphor for the unpredictable nature of life and the need to adapt and persevere through challenging situations.
Themes and Motifs:
- Self-discovery is a central theme throughout the series. Jerry and Tom's journey of understanding their feelings for each other and coming to terms with their sexuality is depicted with sensitivity and authenticity.
- Acceptance is another prominent theme. The support Tom and Jerry receive from their families and friends, particularly in light of potential prejudice, highlights the importance of a supportive environment in fostering self-acceptance and navigating societal expectations.
- Communication plays a crucial role in the development of their relationship. The boys' honest conversations about their feelings and concerns contribute to the strength and authenticity of their bond.
- The motif of taking "big steps" signifies the gradual progression of their relationship, highlighting the significance of each milestone they achieve together.
Overall Impression:
The "Hello Buoys!" series is a heartwarming and engaging exploration of young love, self-discovery, and the pursuit of passion. Through well-developed characters, evocative descriptions, and a compelling narrative, the author offers a nuanced perspective on the complexities of identity, relationships, and the challenges and rewards of embracing one's true self.
The series is particularly noteworthy for its sensitive and realistic portrayal of LGBTQ+ characters and their experiences.
The author avoids stereotypes and clichés, presenting a refreshingly honest and relatable depiction of young love that transcends sexual orientation.The author's inclusion of sailing terminology and technical details adds authenticity to the narrative and provides an intriguing glimpse into the world of competitive sailing. However, this specialized language may occasionally pose a challenge for readers unfamiliar with sailing jargon.
Overall, the "Hello Buoys!" series is a compelling and enjoyable read that offers valuable insights into the human experience, making it a worthwhile addition to the genre of LGBTQ+ coming-of-age fiction.
I like what it says, why wouldn't I? But it wasn't what I expected. I expected a full analysis of technical writing style, use of adverbs, very much like our Writing Masterclass. Since it didn't happen that way I searched for a defintion of Literary Criticism. Either my first introduction to it when I was a member of Litopia was wrong, or the world has moved on. This was the best definition I found.
With that now in mind I can review my imternalised definition of Lit Crit.
What I suspect is that the way I was taught is something done after the less wounding method that the AI tool performs has shown difficuties with writing. It's something to be done quielty and privately when one is dissatisfied with one's work. I was taught a guided method of critiquing sentences, grammar, syntax, flow, etc etc. That is something that looks destructive to an observer, yet is helpful to a writer who has not 'quite got it', and is brave enough to assk why.
I have placed other example of my work into its hands and had a valid result that pleased me less! It refused any with explicit sex scenes by spinnimg its wheels and not processing them, though.
[Updated on: Mon, 21 October 2024 11:17]
Author of Queer Me! Halfway Between Flying and Crying - the true story of life for a gay boy in the Swinging Sixties in a British all male Public School
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Kitzyma
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Thanks, Timmy, for the review of the online AI Literary Critique site!
It sounds like fun, and I'll enjoy trying it (just for fun!) on a couple of my stories.
My experience of Language-based AI indicates that it still has a long way to go before it can be reliably useful. There are cases in which AI models have actually invented things that are not true. Unlike humans, who can at least try to be objective, the current AI trainers appear to approximate a pseudo 'objectivity' by mixing lots of different opinions. And they often include into that mix only the opinions that are approved of by the trainers.
The results of even the more basic AI-related tools must be taken with a grain of salt, and some 'suggestions' they make are actually wrong.
I use this BEFORE sending a story to my human proofreader:
https://www.scribbr.com/proofreading-editing/online-proofrea der/
Actually, it's not really a proofreader in the sense of suggesting placws where something may be unclear, unnecessary, boring, etc, and it's really just a spelling and grammar checker. (Remember to choose the appropriate version of English when you use it!)
When there is an error in the text, it often suggests changes that totally change the intended meaning, so never allow it to make the suggested changes automatically
However, it is good for spelling, punctuation, and basic grammar. So I use it to check those things before sending the story to my human proofreader. the fact that he doesn't need to check for such basic errors makes his task much easier.
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timmy
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This one is acceptable, though not brilliant. It does miss nuances, which is not surprising. It can invent facts, too. It invented a marriage from two characters who were kids!
This means it is unwise to use it for school homework!
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Author of Queer Me! Halfway Between Flying and Crying - the true story of life for a gay boy in the Swinging Sixties in a British all male Public School
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