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larkin
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Location: Massachusetts
Registered: June 2015
Messages: 58
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AZ Story Guy,
I've read your first two chapters of "Never Forget" I can tell that there is more to come so it would not be fair for me to launch a critique on an unfinished work.
I did read the "prescript" where the author explains his methods to the reader. Although not serious, it comes off as a bit of a spoiler. I would opt for trusting your readers and if they don't get it, consider some restructuring or a literary device to clue them in. If the story requires ambiguity, the loose ends might be dealt with in a postscript.
What I see happening here is something more that run of the mill flash-backs. I am reminded of Vonnegut, Slaughterhouse Five where time is fluid. The main character is searching for himself.
I generally look for the positive and I especially like the diamond in the rough. I also don't give a shit about spelling errors.
So AZ Story Guy, I like what you have so far.
Lark
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